audience essay feedback and learner response 🎮
1) Copy and paste your feedback from the email in full - WWW, EBI and LR.
2) What was the word count for your essay? 509 words.
3) What was your strongest paragraph? Why do you think it was better than others? My film/TV paragraph because I included lots of information and I knew a lot about the topic.
4) What was your weakest paragraph? Why do you think it wasn't as good as others? My newspaper paragraph is the worst because I didn't know much about newspapers and didn't make good points.
5) How can you improve your extended writing in GCSE Media Studies in future? Understand the question and simple and good points to add to my answer.
6) Write ONE thing you have learned about the internet, audience and industry from completing this essay. I learnt how the audience has a relationship with the internet and industry.
WWW:
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You’ve delivered a 500 word essay – just! – and
offered some excellent points, particularly on the music industry and film/TV.
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You’ve clearly picked out some key points from
the lessons and notes such as audiences becoming producers in the music
industry and ‘binge-watching’ TV.
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You’ve also tried to include some media theory
and an example to support your points which is great.
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You’ve offered a really good conclusion that
goes into some detail while explaining your opinion on the question. This is an
excellent sign.
EBI:
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I think you could have offered a bit more here
overall in terms of word count – particularly if you’re aiming for that 7+
grade. If you just go for the bare minimum it’s unlikely you’ll reach those top
grades.
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Your section on print/newspapers is weaker than
the first two areas. This is one to revise or look at again because newspapers
will be an in-depth topic later in the course.
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You need to work on your paragraph structure and
in particular topic sentences – the first sentence in a paragraph. Make sure it
focuses on the question and develops your argument.
LR:
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Complete the LR tasks on the GCSE Media
Year 1 blog – Audience and Industry essay feedback LR
2) What was the word count for your essay? 509 words.
3) What was your strongest paragraph? Why do you think it was better than others? My film/TV paragraph because I included lots of information and I knew a lot about the topic.
4) What was your weakest paragraph? Why do you think it wasn't as good as others? My newspaper paragraph is the worst because I didn't know much about newspapers and didn't make good points.
5) How can you improve your extended writing in GCSE Media Studies in future? Understand the question and simple and good points to add to my answer.
6) Write ONE thing you have learned about the internet, audience and industry from completing this essay. I learnt how the audience has a relationship with the internet and industry.
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